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 A beautful night turns out bad part 3

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PostSubject: A beautful night turns out bad part 3   Wed Mar 09, 2016 4:25 pm

Ivy, Emily, and Brandon are at Shakeys cafe. Ivy is eating chili cheese fries, Emily is eating pizza, and Brandon is eating Salisbury steak and mash potatoes with gravy. For drinks, Ivy is having a root beer soda, Emily is having an orange soda and Brandon is having a root beer soda too.

*Ivy sighs*
"Whats wrong Ivy?", asks Emily
"I feel bad because not believing about Brandon hearing the scary noise at first.", said Ivy
"So do I.",replied back Emily
Brandon looks at Emily and Ivy. He doesn't like to see them upset.
"Listen best pals, Its okay you didn't believe me at first. I probably wouldn't have believe you girls either at first.",says Brandon
"But we hurt you for not believing you at first,we are your best friends we suppose to believe you when something happens,you don't lie.",answered back Ivy
Brandon looks at Emily too and she shakes her head yes.
"No buts,Its okay no one is perfect,so don't worry about it. Its okay.",Brandon tells his best friends.
Brandon looks at Emily and Ivy and they look back at him and smile
"Okay,good you girls are cheered up,should we wait for the ghost to come to use to kill him or should we go find the ghost?.",asks Brandon
"Find.",respond back Emily
"Find.",said Ivy
Ivy Brandon Emily open their backpack to see if they remember they got everything they need to kill the ghost
As Ivy checks her backpack and thinks.

To be continued...
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PostSubject: Re: A beautful night turns out bad part 3   Wed Mar 09, 2016 4:42 pm

Cool, although I would have put the 'To be continued' bit on another line.

Other than that, and a few grammar points, it's good :p
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PostSubject: Re: A beautful night turns out bad part 3   Wed Mar 09, 2016 4:51 pm

K will do that next time if I did some grammar wrong please tell me what to fix Smile thats how I get better at grammar right telling me how to fix it Smile
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PostSubject: Re: A beautful night turns out bad part 3   Wed Mar 09, 2016 4:59 pm

★gakuenalice★ wrote:
K will do that next time if I did some grammar wrong please tell me what to fix Smile thats how I get better at grammar right telling me how to fix it Smile

Whenever you are telling a list of items or people, you put commas in between. Like this:
Ivy, Emily and Brandon. I will fix your grammar issues for you so you will know how its supposed to look like.


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PostSubject: Re: A beautful night turns out bad part 3   Wed Mar 09, 2016 5:24 pm

oh okay I get commas a little bit I dont know when to add commas in sentences a little bit do will practice on commas more thank you for fixing the grammar Smile
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